I would probably drop racial tree points in favor of trance and all the VKF goodies—VKF capstone is absurd, and trances is excellent. Keep arcane warrior too at that point. I also think you're losing too much DS—you should only be losing 8 WELF, 15 PLs, and 5 from one epic destiny at most, putting you at 72. For a first life, I'd recover 5 of that via feat, and another 5 by dropping great leveler and no mercy, and some other SD points, to keep the ED doublestrike (I haven't checked whether this requires truly 0 DP, or 1-2). Worst case, you should be at 77ish DS, and I think you can get 82.
I'm also not sure how you're losing that much melee power. You should be down 4 (tomb), 24 (reapers), 10 (destiny cores), 10 (reaper rings). That still puts you comfortably over 300 standing (raged, I'm getting 325 before accounting for any random boosted gear). If you mean low filigree as well, that would make more sense, but that's a different question
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This is true for both of the above posts—I'm getting more offense from this first life breakdown than you are in the completionist, but no RP breakdown. Did you change major things about the build?